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Last week’s story was a short Steampunk
Character sketch, and my plan is to incorporate the characters into a new
chapter or two in “Clockwork Deacon.” Different writers have their own ideas of
what elements to include in the Steampunk genre. Some include supernatural
elements such as zombies and vampires, or alternate dimensions, or time travel,
and some even include a little magic. That’s the beauty of fiction – we write
the rules for our world. Myself, I prefer to stick to the idea of the kinds of
things that could have been theoretically possible, given the scientific laws
we know at this time, applied to the scenario of Victorian Era Mad Science. In
essence, sticking to this world, but with a hypothetical divergence in history.
As such, Steampunk can easily retain the potential in Christian Fiction. It was fun to play with the idea of a character whose ability to communicate is severely limited, and with whom so much is left as an enigma. How the other characters in Loma Roja deal with Deacon, and their perceptions of him, gave me a great deal of story material. I especially liked how this played out in this chapter.
Chapter 11
The Typewriter
From “Clockwork Deacon”
It
might have seemed strange, that Loma Roja had an Automaton in the town before
a typewriter, but that was how it happened. Oddly enough, the Reverend was
responsible for both. A conference in Phoenix called him away from the small
town, and when he returned, he brought back the Underwood with him.
The
device was something of a curiosity, and folks made a special trip to the
pastor's study to view the marvelous writing machine. He extolled its
advantages, particularly those of readable archives of sermon notes and church
records, though there was some speculation that the man had simply discovered a
new toy.
He
retreated to the study in the evening, and locked the door. Deacon waited in
the corner, while he began to type out notes. The typewriter was positioned on
the desk to that Deacon could easily see what the Reverend was doing. He said
nothing to the Automaton, and gave no indication that he required anything from
the copper servant.
He
would glance from time to time at the metal face, and then return to the
typing. Each night, he took the paper from the machine, and locked it in a
drawer of his desk. A fresh sheet of paper remained in the typewriter, and the
Reverend would retire to bed, leaving Deacon in the study.
Mrs.
Randolph placed his breakfast in front of him. AJust what are you up to all these nights in
there, all by yourself?@ she
asked.
AI'm
not all by myself,@
Reverend Randolph replied. ADeacon
is with me.@
AAll
right, so you're not by yourself. What are you two doing in there?@
AI am
working on a project, that I would rather not divulge at the moment,@ he
said.
AWell,
I would ask Deacon, but he wouldn't be able to answer me anyway. It just
concerns me that you're staying up so late every night.@
He
gave her hand a reassuring squeeze. AIt's
nothing to worry about, my dear. I assure you, I won't over-tax myself on this.@
After
breakfast, he went to his study, and looked at the paper in the typewriter. The
paper was blank, and Deacon had gone about his chores for the day. He heaved a
sigh, and started on his sermon notes for the next meeting of the church.
That
night, he locked the door of the study, and pulled a chair in front of Deacon.
In one hand, he held a sign with large letters. ADeacon, do you know what this says?@ he
asked.
Deacon
looked at the sign, and gave a single nod.
ACan
you read the sign, or do you know what it says based on what has been taught to
you previously?@
There
was no response.
AHow
clumsy of me. I asked the question in a manner that you cannot answer with a
simple yes or no. Deacon, can you read?@
The
head clicked side to side.
ACan
you learn?@
He
processed the question, and then gave his nod.
ADeacon,
if you learned to read, then you would be able to write as well. You would be
able to communicate with us in more than just gestures, or just by nodding or
shaking your head. Do you understand?@
He
nodded.
AI do
not expect you to master penmanship, but I believe you can easily learn to use
the typewriter. Have you been watching me use it these past couple of weeks?@
He
nodded.
ADo
you understand its function?@
The
single side to side shake.
AThe
typewriter is a machine that imprints letters onto a sheet of paper, that
anyone who knows how to read can then understand. These letters, when grouped
together in a specific order, represent the words we speak. You could put words
onto paper, that I could know what you are thinking. Do you understand?@
Deacon
nodded again.
Reverend
Randolph went to his shelf, and removed a children's reading primer. He turned
to the first page, and began with the letter 'A'. It was difficult to judge how
well Deacon understood the lessons, since he could not repeat back the
information being imparted to him. At the end of the evening, though, the
pastor put a fresh sheet of blank paper into the typewriter, and had Deacon
stand over it.
ADo
you see the letter 'A' on the typewriter, Deacon? If so, press the key.@
The
mechanical hand reached forward, and typed a single letter.
His
excitement turned to disappointment. AThat
is the letter 'H'. Look at the 'A' in this book again, Deacon, and see if you
can find it on the typewriter.@
It
took four more tries before Deacon struck the correct key. Subsequent letters
of the alphabet took similar numbers of attempts, and by the time it late
enough to call it a night, he'd barely made it through half the alphabet. ATomorrow
evening, Deacon. We'll resume tomorrow evening.@
The
next evening, he started back at the letter 'A', and was pleased to find that,
at least he didn't have to start all over again. Deacon correctly identified
each letter he had successfully learned the night before. Before they finished
that night, Deacon knew the entire alphabet.
Over the
next week, though, teaching him how to use the alphabet proved to be an even
greater challenge. Still using the children's primer, Rev. Randolph prompted
Deacon to form simple words. He would type the letters as the pastor dictated
them, but when told to type the word 'cat,' the Automaton sat there and waited.
ADeacon,
do you understand what a cat is?@ He
felt like he was giving a scolding to a recalcitrant child. AI
have explained what letters form the word cat, and you know where these letters
are located on the typewriter. It should be a simple matter, then for you to
write the word.@
Deacon
rested in front of the typewriter, as still as if he were waiting in the back
of the church for services to finish.
Reverend
Randolph settled into his chair, next to the Automaton. His voice became soft
and pensive. AYou've
been part of this family almost as long as my sons have, and a part of this
community for all the years since we moved here. We can speak to you, and you
respond to us with your actions, but do you know how much we long to have you
respond to us in the means that we understand best?@
That
was the frustration; he spoke candidly, and yet Deacon gave no indication of
the statement having any impact upon him. He neither inclined his head to look
at the Reverend, nor gave any gesture whatsoever to offer any clue to what his
response might be.
AYou
learn so many things that we never expected you to learn, nor that we even
thought to teach you. You simply learned by watching us, or maybe by reasoning
out the process in your own mind. Surely, you can learn this, can you not?
Surely, the thought processes built into your mind must mimic our own in some
way, or least be able to be translated into words we can understand. All the
things you've done for this family and this town, there must be wisdom and
intellect within you. Surely, you can either confirm or deny that with a simple
yes or no answer?@
Deacon
still did not respond, and the minister lowered his head into his hands. Lord,
is this how we are to Thee? Dost Thou ask us questions, and we go about our
daily lives as if we did not even hear Thee? Does my my spirit remain quiet and
unresponsive, when Thou tryest to teach me how better to pray? Lord, am I to
Thee even half as good a servant as Deacon is to me? I would that I could
confidently say 'yes,' but Lord, I know if I tell Deacon to go and work here,
he will go. How many times hast Thou commanded me to go and serve, and I have
instead gone about my own business instead of Thine? Father in Heaven, what
could he teach me, if Deacon could but speak?
There
was a touch on his shoulder, and he raised his face to look at the Automaton
standing over him. The static eyes were turned his way, and one hand rested on
him in a close approximation of a supportive gesture, before the face turned
towards the door and Deacon rolled away.
Rev.
Randolph stood and followed, retrieving the key from the door after Deacon had
unlocked it and passed through. The Automaton led him outside, and to the dark
area behind the church, away from any light escaping from nearby windows. The
copper face turned skyward, and stared out at the myriads of stars shining
overhead.
The
Pastor looked up also, wondering if there were something out there special to
see, or if Deacon's focus was on a particular asterism, but he could not
discern anything beyond the general area the gaze was aimed at.
ADo
you wonder about the stars, Deacon? With words, you can ask questions, and
maybe receive answers.@
He
just stood, staring, and not moving.
Rev.
Randolph sighed, trying to fathom whatever might be holding Deacon's attention.
He quoted the first Scripture to come to mind. AWhen I consider Thy heavens, the work of
Thy fingers, the moon and the stars, which Thou hast ordained; what is man,
that Thou art mindful of him? And the son of man, that Thou visitest him? For
Thou hast made him a little lower than the angels, and hast crowned him with
glory and honour. Thou madest him to have dominion over the works of Thy hands;
Thou hast put all things under his feet: All sheep and oxen, yea, and the
beasts of the field; the fowl of the air, and the fish of the sea, and
whatsoever passeth through the paths of the seas.@
The
clockwork sound of motion drew his eyes away from the sky. Deacon nodded at
him, and then rolled to his shed. The door of the shed closed, and he was left
alone in the dark.
I
don't understand. Did he bring me out here just to get me to quote that Psalm?
Or did that Psalm satisfy whatever question he had in his head? Was it for him,
or for me? If man is a little lower than the angels, what does that make
Deacon? If we question why God would be mindful of men, what must that imply to
Deacon? He is a most complicated device of man's ingenuity, and yet, compared
to all that God has made, he is as insignificant as those toys that he made for
Christmas some years ago.
I am as insignificant as one of those toys, and I am in
infinitely more complicated creation of God's ingenuity. I can't even puzzle
out the workings of a less complicated toy. He turned his eyes back towards the house and the
study. I'm not even sure how the typewriter works, yet, I can't help but
feel that Deacon studied it that first night, and deciphered every mechanical
detail of the machine. So, why can't he make use of it the way it is intended
to be used?
He
returned his gaze to the stars for a while, before retiring to bed.
2 comments:
My favorite fiction stories are those that make me think deep thoughts, and you have done that with this chapter. Very good!
Oooh. Nice. Really nice. I honestly DO enjoy your approach to steampunk. It might start growing on me now. LOL.
Great chapter. I liked the interaction between the Reverend and Deacon, it seemed so bittersweet, but just right. I loved the visual of Deacon learning from a children's primer though, that was just adorable! There's some excellent food for thought in here too--nicely done. Thanks for joining in Friday Fiction this week!
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